Feedback

Melissa is the AEA consultant providing feedback on your pages. The highlighted items require action on your part. I will be revisiting those areas to ensure that you have acted on the feedback. If you have any questions, please contact me at mhesner@aea267.k12.ia.us


 * PHASE 3 FEEDBACK FORM **


 * **Project Requirements ** || **Completed/Comments ** ||
 * Project Information Page Complete and Updated for each team member || I see that Maya and Katie have filled in information on the Project Information Page. How are your projects coming? This page will help to keep you on track and communicate to your teammates how they might be able to help you. ||
 * A new page has been created for each team member’s project || I don't see any project pages yet. Please let me know if you need any help. ||
 * Each team member’s project is beginning to take shape as evidenced by the action plan and completed student survey. || I can't wait to see your projects! ||
 * Evidence that other team members have either provided feedback or contributed to the success of the project. || Even if you have just a little bit started, get it posted to the wiki so your teammates and I can start to offer you feedback. ||
 * **Team Communication ** ||  ||
 * Evidence that your team is using the discussion tab to communicate. || Not much communicating going on. Try to set aside time each week to work on the wiki and communicate with your teammates. Doesn't have to be much. Start with one time a week for 5 minutes and see what happens. Remember one of the beauties of this project is you don't have to all work at the same time, but you do need to communicate in order get the job done. ||
 * Evidence that all team members are participating either via communication and/or changes to the pages. || The end of the project will be here before we know it! If you need any help, please remember to ask your teammates, your classmates, your teacher, Heather, Becky, or me. ||
 * **Phases 1 & 2 - Actions on Feedback ** ||  ||
 * Phase 1 feedback has been addressed and changes are evident. || Proofread and edit please. ||
 * Phase 2 Feedback has been addressed and changes are evident. || Proofread and edit please. ||


 * **Editorial Requirements ** || **Completed/Comments ** ||
 * <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">Each team member has posted his/her editorial on the wiki. || Elise, Katie, and Maya - I see all of your editorials posted. Great!

Elise and Katie, please reference your sources/research you used throughout your editorials.

All three of you have minor grammatical errors. Please help each other proofread and locate these mistakes. ||
 * <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">Each team member submitted his/her editorial to a local newspaper || <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">**Information will be gathered from the teacher** ||
 * <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">If editorial was published in newspaper, evidence of that is included. || Any luck submitting editorials? Please let me know if you need help with this. ||
 * **<span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">Team Communication ** ||  ||
 * <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">There is evidence that your team is using the discussion tab to communicate || There was less discussion activity in December compared to November. Remember communication is a key to creating a great project, and it makes it fun too! ||
 * <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">There is evidence that all team members are participating either via communication and/or changes to the page. || This is a great time to make some changes, particularly your Project Information page.

Maya - I see you have posted some of your project information. I think a debate sounds like a great idea. Have you started thinking about a timeline or help you might need from teammates? ||
 * **<span style="color: #000000; display: block; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif'; text-align: center;">Phase 1 - Actions on Feedback **** ||  ||
 * <span style="color: #000000; font-family: 'Arial','sans-serif';">There is evidence that the team as addressed the feedback from phase 1. || There are still several edits to be made. Please proofread your introductory paragraphs on your homepage and arguments page. See suggestions below. ||


 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-align: center; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**Home Page Requirements** || <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**Comments/Completed** ||
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Title is present || Yes, and I like the use of alliteration in your title. Nice touch! ||
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Team member’s names (no last names please) || Completed ||
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Position Statement is present || Please add your position statement to your homepage. Your position statement is as simple as, "Medical testing on animals is not acceptable." ||
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Catchy introductory paragraph complete || Your use of facts in your introductory paragraph is very effective. It would be great if you could give us more information as to where that information came from. Cite your source and give us more background information if possible.

It looks like you are going to focus on animal testing for common household products and life-saving surgeries. Have you also considered the use of animal testing for pharmaceutical purposes?

I don't know what vivisection is. Can you explain this more? What about talking about U.S. products and procedures that readers will be familiar with? I would like to see you dig a little deeper into this and include a product that is very familiar in the United States in order to really grab your reader's attention.

Proofread!! Watch your use of capital letters on common nouns. Remember only proper nouns should be capitalized. Also, make sure your sentences are complete. There are a few sentences in your paragraph that are incomplete. Finally, proofread for your use of commas. || <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;"> **Remember you will need at least 5 different types of sources** || Yes. ||
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Supporting visual on home page is in place. || The overall appearance of your homepage is very appealing! I like your spacing, use of font styles and sizes, and location of your image. The image you chose to use is subtle but makes a huge statement. Also, great job on including a poll. I tested it, and it works! :) ||
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-align: center; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">**Arguments Page Requirements** ||  ||
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Title is present || Yes, and I appreciate your introductory paragraph. Please proofread and edit your introductory paragraph. "They're" should be "There". Also, your second sentence is run-on and confusing. In the third sentence, should "are" be "our"? ||
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Chart containing at least 10 statements based on research (remember you should have at least 15 when complete) || 15+ arguments present! The second to last argument is an incomplete sentence. I am curious about this argument. ||
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Research coming from a variety of sources (journals, magazines, blogs, etc.)
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Works cited entries accurate and correct for each piece of research || Several of your citations are incomplete. Please make sure to correctly complete your citations. If needed, use a MLA citation creator. There is help on the Helpful Resources page on the NDW2011 wiki. ||
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Visual of some sort to support and enhance your message || Please add this. ||
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Arguments present come from research--NOT student opinions! Just the facts please. || Yes, most are pretty strong! For this topic, it is easy to find many opinions. I appreciate how you have found facts from resources that might have been littered with opinions. ||
 * **<span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; display: block; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-align: center; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Team Communication ** ||  ||
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Evidence that your team is using the discussion tab to communicate || There are a few posts, but there is not a lot of discussion going on. Support each other. Ask each other questions. Post feedback to each others work. Remember, communication is a key to success in this project.

Try to set a specified time a couple of times each week to communicate with your teammates through the discussion page of your wiki. ||
 * <span style="background-color: transparent; color: #000000; font-family: Arial; font-size: 14.6667px; text-decoration: none; vertical-align: baseline;">Evidence that all team members are participating either via communication and/or changes to the page. || All members contributed to the arguments page. Great!

It appears Maya and Katie have actually gone in and edited the wiki. Thayne and Elise, please let me know if you need help using the wiki or post questions to your teammates through the discussion page.

Please make sure you are all doing your part!

Also, please make sure you are all working on your editorials. I can't wait to see them! ||